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Reviews For: Fighting Perfection

C.F.Adams
2007-08-15
ch 2,
abuseHey, it's a great story but I got lost in the second chapter where Abbie was talking to Nate and the next thing I know she was taking a bath. I was looking for something to fill the gap. Watch the spelling; such as diffing. I think you were trying to spell digging. More that once you spelled that "hath" And Abbie is spelled with a "Y" not "ie"

I hope you write more to this Fighting perfection.
C.Sabbadin
2007-06-10
ch 1,
abuseI think you should have separated some of the paragraphs into smaller ones.

Also you start off talking about perfection embodied in three girls, and then you tear off on a ramble about Abbie's friend being in a coma. Though i may be wrong this seemed totally unneccessary.

The idea is good but you should focus on how their perfection effects their lives.
Kelaia
2007-01-11
ch 1,
abuseI like the idea of this story, and again it is well written. Just watch out for the occasional spelling/grammar mistake [last line - diffing, should it be digging??]. Looking forward to your next update!
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