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| Alice Carrie 2008-07-01 ch 4,  | abuseinteresting and intriguing story |
| Wicca Girl 2007-07-28 ch 23, | abuseWow. I loved the story It had a lot of surprises. I cant believe Smilly had acted like a **. That was so not her. Nice story. Awesome so going 2 my favs |
| EmotionalTrauma 2007-06-12 ch 15, | abuseCraig of many names! You called him Ken in this chapter, but oh well... It's easier to find things in other people's works then it is to find it in ours... You just saved my day from complete and utter boredom. Thanx! Biohazard |
| EmotionalTrauma 2007-06-12 ch 14, | abuseOk, just one thing. When they leave for a walk, Craig suddenly becomes Charlie for a sentence. Other than that, still wonderful! |
| EmotionalTrauma 2007-06-12 ch 8, | abuseA couple grammar and spelling issues, but otherwise, wonderful! |
| EmotionalTrauma 2007-06-12 ch 5, | abuseFunny, this reminds me of a thing me and my friends (who cares bout grammar, school's out!) did. We sat looking at our yearbooks, doing a who's hot, who's not thing. Totally out of character for us, but oh well... I love your plot idea, it isn't something I've seen on fictionpress yet. Congrats, I shall go read more now... Biohazard |
| scardycat 2007-03-28 ch 23, | abuseYour book wasn't bad but I think you should do a sequel. |
| SilentRaven81 2007-03-27 ch 23, | abuseokay, you totally have to do a sequel, you cannot just leave loyal readers like me hanging on the edge of a knife not knowing what happens between Chris and Craig and Anna! Jordan is a little playing...well, anyway...so yeah... WRITE MORE! |
| scardycat 2007-03-26 ch 20, | abuseI love your story. I think you should have Anna be with Chris. |
| Elle Winters 9 2007-03-23 ch 18, | abuseaw evryone says Craig, but I want Anna to go with Chris He sounds so sweet! |
| SilentRaven81 2007-02-16 ch 15, | abuseokay, I vote that she goes with Craig, because he is sweet and funny and klutzy (which is sometimes annoying in a guy, but with him it's more endearing) and Jordan is a complete and total jerk who, even though you have to give him a break for loosing his dad, treats Anna nothing like what she deserves. CRAIG ALL THE WAY! |
| Simon L. Dosley 2007-02-15 ch 15, | abuseGood, it was fun to read. :] Keep going, I'm anxious to see what happens. Oh, and Anna should definitely go with Craig. |
| RayRay and Beanzie 2007-02-12 ch 15, | abuseHey Ive been sick and been reading this since yesterday! I woke up and then continued to read! Its so good! I love your style and the carachter description. It was a bit odd with Ava's personality change so sudden and also that Delancey chick randomly comin up yknow? Maybe me, being sick i might not have noticed but anyways, keep it up! I wanna see some more chapters! |
| Alexis LePlume 2007-02-11 ch 14, | abuseI'm afraid that your m.c. seems a little superficial. She doesn't sound at all like the geeky girl you're apparently trying to make her out to be. She's actually more of a prep. >.< Okay, otherwise, this is interesting to read. You have a lot of things going on plotwise, which not a lot of people can do. The only things I think you need to work on are descriptions and the believability of your characters and situations. Some of what you write, based on what you're trying to set up the charries to be, just wouldn't happen. Anna should really drop Jordan and go for Craig. I don't even like blonde guys. xP Alexis |
| BrownEyedLemur 2007-02-09 ch 5, | abuseGood so far! I'd read more but I have to go. 10/10 Seems realilistic and everything with her thoughts so yeah. Can't wait to read more! |