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no.peace.los.angeles 2007-01-12 . chapter 1
Quite an odd piece, but I like odd, so it's all good. I love the second stanza. Everything in the lunchbox is so masculine, and it feels like the 40s or sometime back then, so great job with that. I also really like the way you constructed "sometimes at the same time." Fabulous work. Keep writing! :)
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