This would make a great romantic comedy film, all the right elements. Good work!

I really have enjoyed your story and do hope you will eventually continue with it.

wow.. a great story. I'm glad that I didn't bypass this story. So curious about the next chapter and the explanations it'll hold.

I love your story! :D it's so awesome! I can't wait for next one.

great chapter

the detective asking her questions was my favorite part...actually the whole hospital scene was great.

i'm looking forward to more scenes with Allyne's father in them.

I love the hospital scene. :D

Allyne's dad is really intense, huh? lol

Keep it up. Can't wait for the next chapter. :)

i have a feeling that the 3 guys were sent by trenton. i hope ally's father can do something about it. i believe marcus will be able to protect ally

Wow. I really love this story. I hope you update soon, and I hope this will be a complete story unlike others which are left hanging. Great story. :)

kinda feel sad for allyne... trenton must have hurt her deeply... i wonder does marcus like her because he wan to "heal" her or see her as a challenge

am. so. totally. in. love. very. hehe. awesome update!

Awesome story!

I adore your story! :)

IT DOES NOT LOOK LIKE CRAP! Your struggle does not show at all, this chapter is as awesome as the others, if not more! :) Update soon!

This is going to be a good one, I just know it! :) Well done you.

The flopping fish was funny... I actually like to sail myself, and while I have a completely different writing style, it'd be nice to have more details of the "feeling" of sailing. More of the rocking of the boat, the smell, etc. But I'm just a sensory person :) If you have time, would like to know what you think of either my stories, "This Adventure Called Love..." or "Karate...". Update soon!