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| SirScott 2007-03-01 ch 2,  | abuseThe flying door was nice. Was the stepmother killed in the fire? The glutton sack was a good touch, you can't have a fairytale without something like that. Keep up the good work. ~SirScott |
| SirScott 2007-02-25 ch 1, | abuseIt is a good start. It's interesting that one of the character had his teeth knocked out in a fight. Most stories that have fight scenes in them, the characters almost always never lose any teeth even though that isn't the case in real life. Keep up the good work. ~SirScott |