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| His Mercy's Waiting 2007-05-17 ch 1,   | Aww, that's really sweet. I really liked this line: "Soft and gentle snow like a royal carpet." There was one part that was kind of weird though: "Something nothing about I can do". Maybe you could consider rewording it so it flows more easily. Keep writing! |