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X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X
2007-10-29
ch 1,
abuseThe last two lines were amazing. The imagry is very vivid and I can picture it well, thou I'm not much a major in vocabulary ^^'... Great work thou!
Ann
2007-02-11
ch 1, anon.
abuseIt's haunting...it's gothically written. It's something I would find in a Dean Koontz novel. Well done!
S. Ben Beach
2007-01-29
ch 1,
abuseohh man, reading that even in daylight (10am) scared me.
I really like the 3rd stanza:
"And daylight is lost in the lavender sails

As gained and growing from tempest wind"
that is incredible. Took me a while to get it (10am also means that I just got up >.
Randomisation
2007-01-23
ch 1,
abusereally cool!!
Aquafied
2007-01-21
ch 1,
abuseTheir faces dangle like chandeliers
-that is some great imagery


loves and lovely
Circus
2007-01-11
ch 1,
abuseI love it! Beautiful, yet coarse, and unrefined even with the beautiful wording. You always know the right words to use to evoke the correct emotion for an image. Very neat. Gorgeously done.
Volo Purus.
2007-01-11
ch 1,
abuseHow do you come up with these?!

They're amazing...
EnigmaticArsenic
2007-01-10
ch 1,
abuseThis is very befitting October- something haunting but harmless. Kinda like a breath of wind caught amongst dead leaves.

But anyhow, might I say- WOW! you've been very prolific lately. (Keep it up! lol)
Inkspilled
2007-01-10
ch 1,
abuseAt the beginning the rhyming is working, then near the end you stop. It sort of unbalances it. But other than that most of it's good. But I don't see how faces can dangle...*scary thoughts* XD.
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