The last two lines were amazing. The imagry is very vivid and I can picture it well, thou I'm not much a major in vocabulary ^^'... Great work thou!

It's haunting...it's gothically written. It's something I would find in a Dean Koontz novel. Well done!

ohh man, reading that even in daylight (10am) scared me.
I really like the 3rd stanza:
"And daylight is lost in the lavender sails

As gained and growing from tempest wind"
that is incredible. Took me a while to get it (10am also means that I just got up >.

really cool!!

Their faces dangle like chandeliers
-that is some great imagery


loves and lovely

I love it! Beautiful, yet coarse, and unrefined even with the beautiful wording. You always know the right words to use to evoke the correct emotion for an image. Very neat. Gorgeously done.

How do you come up with these?!

They're amazing...

This is very befitting October- something haunting but harmless. Kinda like a breath of wind caught amongst dead leaves.

But anyhow, might I say- WOW! you've been very prolific lately. (Keep it up! lol)

At the beginning the rhyming is working, then near the end you stop. It sort of unbalances it. But other than that most of it's good. But I don't see how faces can dangle...*scary thoughts* XD.