Good! Nice sense of darkness and revelation-reminds me of Star Wars, but then almost everything does. I really like the first two stanzas. It gets simpler as it goes on, but that's ok-perhaps 'it gets starker' is a better description, as from the evidence of the beginning I think you know what you're doing. Good work. One concrit: "glamour shatters like...glass" was very good, I could picture, that, but harp-strings are less common, so it was a less powerful comparison because I had to think about what that would look like.

loved it. I like how its broken up great job keep it up

Interesting formatting (in a good way). It goes fantastically with the title and the theme, because in a way, the poem itself is

"broken" and yet "whole." Sometimes the visual representation is just as important as the words themselves and you did a nice job.

I'm not usually one for rhyming poems, but this works well.

umm... too braindead right now.. too early in the morning... but I can tell you that the last 2? stanzas ( a.k.a. the parts I got immediately) are really nicely worded and very well expressed.

nice rhyming, nice message ] i like the title as well, & first stanza is my fave. keep writing! Bex xx

Nice job. The concept is something I'm very familiar with, so it really speaks to me.

Wow! I really liked your poem especially the line that says "because you are you". I also like the way that you broke the poem up, putting half center aligned and half left aligned; it kills the monotony.

nice! i like it! the format is different too! not boring straight lined...woke me up!

great job!

oh and i like you gun on ur profile thing lol just so you know.

Wow, this is really good. The first two stanzas are absolutely mind blowing, amazing work. Write on!

Anna _

That was an interesting way of presenting a poem. I envy those who find their one true self.

SirScott

Very well done .. and thank you for the review :D I have to say that the first stanza is my favorite part of this poem great job and Keep it Up!

Woah. I really like! Keep on going, GREAT Job on all your writings!

Wow, I like this. Thanks for reviewing. Keep writing.

Yes.

i LOVE this! good jobie!