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| Zephyr J. 2007-12-01 ch 1,  | abuseWow. I think out of all your work, the imagery of this piece blows everything out of the water. The horndog in me wants to ask so many questions, but lets refrain. Also, I have a sense of respect for the male character; I don't know much of us who would have had the decency to know when to stop. And good thing, too. They would have gotten busted! Very nice work, and I hope to read some more of your work. |
| Princess of Lies 2007-11-18 ch 1, | abuseGosh, that's something I've dreamed about doing with my friend, but there are three problems. 1) He doesn't like me that way. 2)I'd be way to scared. I can even be hugged by the opposite sex without having my face turn bright red, not to mention that I completely freeze up... 3) He wouldn't stop there, I know he wouldn't. But amazing story, really and truely. |
| Rovandin 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abusewow, very descriptive. actually the description of the cafeteria wuz mah favorite part. especially the "it was cool" line. |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2007-02-09 ch 1, | abuseThis was beautiful, although I think a little tiny more detail about the surroundings that they're in would help a little bit, like saying exactly where they are - I'm just really a detail-oriented person, I guess. It was really beautiful, though. I really liked reading it. -stixerz- |
| Nemitta 2007-02-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseI liked it alot it. The description was beautiful and well though out. I personally can think of no improvements needed. I love the little moral at the end, for it is so true. I thank you for a great read. |
| Whyt spillage 2007-01-19 ch 1, | abusenice...vague but enough to keep u going ^_^ |
| Miss Rosie Smith 2007-01-16 ch 1, | abuseHi This was good. Keep writing. Rosie |