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Reviews For: The Wolf and the Lamb - Reviews: Page 1 of 6

Amarena
2008-06-28
ch 21,
abuseHi!

..To be honest, I don't remember how I found this story - and I started reading it barely two days ago! When I clicked on it, I was expecting something entirely different, but I'm glad to made it like this. It does feel like it's not entirely "finished", but at the same time, it feels alright. Oh, and the fairy tale at the end is one of the sweetest thing I've ever read.

So, basically, thank you for writing this - I loved it. I guess I'll be sticking around for a while, checking your other stories... expect more reviews coming!
daemon_9
2008-06-24
ch 21, anon.
abuseaw... it's so cute! i love your stories. wish i was this talented.
BlackWolfCub
2008-05-30
ch 21,
abuseBig smile on my face I love how you developed the species people and the divisions. This is brilliant and an amazing style of writing. love it
bleepbloopbanana
2008-03-11
ch 3,
abuseAnother lurvely chapter. I'm still in awe of how well you've blended the human/animal characteristics. It's very well done.

The only thing that bugged me about this chapter was the excessive use of '--'... it got a little distracting, is all.

Favorite lines:

"“FUCK!” the leader of the pack hissed, “What the hell spooked him? Did one of you guys do that?”' Diction! Spook instead of scare! Dunno why that impressed me so much, but it did. :D

"Everyone denied it. So much for teamwork."

“I'm gonna be a ram when I grow up. But I won't hit you.” Aww... how cute. Disturbing on some levels... but cute.

"And – he was getting on his own nerves." We've all felt like that before, hehe.

"Except for the one lamb who just stood there in the melee watching it all, his arms crossed over his chest." Such a Taylor thing to do. I don't even know why I think that, because he hasn't been characterized enough, really, but still. He's definitely not ver 'lamb' like is he?

Great chapter, once again.

Much love,

Bleep
bleepbloopbanana
2008-03-11
ch 2,
abuseI was a bit afraid that this chapter wouldn't live up to the (high) expectations I had of the first one, but you proved me wrong again. :3 This one was certainly different from the first, mainly because it was dialogue oriented with almost no description but I found I liked it just as well. And, Taylor is an adorable sheep. I can see why Tristan wants to eat him up... hehehe.

Favorite Lines: There's so many!

"I'm nearly 12, y'know. In seven months." Aww, adorable. The age thing kind of squicks me out, but he's so cute I just don't care.

"And that I don't 'play well with others' – that was on my kindergarten report card." AWW AWW AWW! I have no words! AWW. (Except that that was written on my KG report card too... ;-;)

"And that I don't 'play well with others' – that was on my kindergarten report card." Adorably awkward and brought a smile to my face.

Great work, as always... I'm SO glad this story is finished. Can't wait to read it all! -skips-

Much love,

Bleep
bleepbloopbanana
2008-03-11
ch 1,
abuseIt's sort of hard to come up with an eloquent review when my mouth is hanging open in awe. But I'll try!

First of all, what caught me was the description of the herding in the beginning. It was just a brief paragraph but even in that I knew that I would LOVE the rest of the fic. And I did. :3

There wasn't anything spectacular about the flow or the writing, (though it did move from scene to scene rather well) but just the characterization and Tristan's stream of consciousness and how well you established a completely different world (with Laws and Predetors and things) in a relatively short paragraph was AMAZING. I'm stunned, I really am.

I only have a few complaints: 1) the use of numbers in the story when they could have easily been replaced with their word counterparts: i.e., ten instead of 10, eleven instead of 11. Dunno, that might just be a pet peeve of mine.

Oh, and the non-graphicness of the sex scene made me sad. D: It also seemed a bit off with the rest of the story, how quickly you made that transition. But it didn't make me lose interest one bit, so that's alright.

Favorite lines:

"[...]suggesting that perhaps he should go see what's on the grass-eater line at the cafeteria at school. Or perhaps some carrion was more his speed – dead things don't move so fast." Just... the amount of detail! And yet, totally not! I don't understand how you do it.

"You can't kill someone when you're inside them..." Amusing and something like just what a Wolf-boy would think. Heheh.

Great work, which deserves far more recognition than it currently has.

Much love and keep writing,

Bleep
arelente2
2008-02-26
ch 21,
abuseI really liked this...

The first part of the whole series was very slow and almost unprogressive, after the middle things began to speed up and in flashes. I guess a series this long got you tired up huh.
pfeiffer
2008-01-22
ch 21,
abusethis was simply AMAZING!
paputsza
2008-01-18
ch 1,
abuse-.o tell me now how mant nipples do these creraturers have. any other fuury-type characterristic i can ignore, but if rhey have six nipples i'm squicked.
maggiepyro101
2008-01-12
ch 21,
abusei loved it
Phantasmagorical
2008-01-11
ch 21, anon.
abuseThank you, thank you, thank you for finishing this fantastic story of yours. I must say, out of all the stories I've read, yours is definitely one of the most creative and original. As well as very cute and sweet.. and happy; but also sad... Alright, so it's just EMOTIONAL all around.

I'm sure I've said a lot of the good things about your story in my past reviews. So instead I'll just remark on the ending itself. Thank you, thank you, thank you for not making the ending vague/open/unanswered. I absolutely HATE those types of endings for THESE types of stories. With stories like this, I don't WANT you to leave the ending open so the reader can choose how he wants it to end; because for me, that just doesn't make it feel complete. This is YOUR story and you should end it how you want it to; and I'll be perfectly satisfied with that.

I must say, considering everything that happened, the ending was a very happy one. Unlike some people (COUGHCOUGHJ.K.ROWLINGCOUGHCOUGH), you didn't just kill off a bunch of likable characters for the sake of people dying. However, even just the person you really focused on dying had a big impact, in my opinion. So... Alls well it ends well! I'm honestly sad that it's over; it's not often something so... good.. comes around. You have my salutations as one of the best authors in my opinion.

P.S. I hope your life is going better since the last time I talked with you. Thank you again for writing such a wonderful story to it's end!
FreeFallHeadFirstOffARoof
2008-01-06
ch 1,
abuseThis story is weird but cute in so many ways, and what better way to show differences and how u can still get along, than a prey and predator!

:D
Jackie
2007-12-14
ch 21, anon.
abuseomg that is a great ending! its soo cute lol ^-^
exancientgod
2007-12-06
ch 21,
abuseWow. This was so very awsome on SO many levels. *_* Tristan and Taylor make for the cutest, sweetest couple ever. And I love how you kept the whole we-shouldn't-deny-our-differences-but-should-get-along-anyway theme running throughout.

The story did feel a little too drawn out to me. And what with my tendency to get attached to pairings, reading about Taylor's sleeping around with other people after his break-up with Tristan irked me to no end. x_x But that's just a personal pet peeve, and other than that: beautiful story with a great premise and wonderful characters. [loves]
True.Randomness
2007-11-29
ch 21,
abuseThis became my favorite stories of them all. It had so many themes and it was so well writen I could have asked for a better one. This story was wonderful and beautiful like no other. I think I will go a re=read it aging, though I never do that for this story I will. I can't wait to see your next work!
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