This is beautiful, in my opinion. You did a wonderful job of expressing the passion without using anything even slightly vulgar.

this is awesome.

love it.

Ashlyn Marie

that is absolutly brillent. I love it to bits! Sheesh. It's my favourite!

Sorry you must think I'm mad, but it's cool. and sorry about any spelling mistakes in my reviews(I'm lazy).

Lovely and kind of erotic. I love it!

Wow. Its so simple and yet so powerful. Great job Slinky!

'Burn her til she sings your song' - oh my god that is such a sensual line. This whole poem is full of invigorating passionate energy, and the use of rhyme makes it trip off the tongue. I love it. I love the imagery of 'break the sky', it's new, unusual. However the last line should be, in my personal humble opinion, 'And fade away, last taste of ash', without the question mark. The question sort of breaks up the rhythm that was established so well in the previous lines. But brilliantly written.