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| MC Tane 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseGreat story, I believe. The best bit was the debate/philosophical part, with a cynic's remarks and philosopher's ones. Nick is just so cynical it blocks out deeper sense to get into his head. Honey, Life's illogical, even love's illogical, and probably the greatest stupidity a man can ever commit, but hey we still do it, yeah? Why's he so touchy? That's what I'm about to find out.I find this very interesting. |
| Matt Lopez 2007-05-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseThe dialogue was great. Still, there is great similarity, inevitable I know, between all the characters that you write. I would love to see a vast contrast between personalities and characters, like real life. I can't wait to read the next chapter. |
| Wess Root 2007-04-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis short story was very different from the last one. I liked it, it delt with issues that are very important and need to be addressed. A lot of people like Neil are affraid to talk about their beliefs in the after life. I thought it was tacktful and interesting. Good job, you show great potential in different writing styles. |