Um update update update?

fabulous

i dont mean to sound naive but what is it a wolf, a dog what?

aw, so wait the little girl died?

burn.. lol.. i lied, im reading one more before bedtime... well if 4:53 am is bedtime.

:( so sad, but i must carry on for one last chapter before i go to sleep.

aww :( oh well, on 2 chapter 2

Wow... amazing story. I don't really know what else to say at the moment. I hope that you will continue this and update it soon.

Really good story, got me hooked right away. Can't wait to see what happeneds next. Update soon.

im so sory i didnt mean for my reveiw that i put on for chapter 6 to be taken in that way! it was just a litle inconsistent, first it was a beleivable story about a lebian romance, then a cop story, still believeable just a little awkward, then a fantasy, did i miss something? or is the story realy inconsistent

Say what?

yay you updated! (so did I fyi)

This was a pretty graphic chapter, but then again I don't normally read these types of stories, the whole police and murder thing really isn't my cup of tea.

But I like the characterization, and the conversations are improving a lot. They're beginning to have a natural feel to them, and not as forced.

However you still have to watch the run-on sentences. I found a few really lone ones that still distract. There are a few spelling errors, but you're making great strides in catching them, nowhere near previous chapters.

Where you wrote I slumped down further, while pressing my forehead against the cooled window and cutting, James off. I don't think there should be a comma after cutting. It just doesn't sound right having a pause right there.

You really have to get down commas to break down your sentences. I know it's easier to write it though, but it can be distracting, especially if someone is a real stickler for grammar, I'm not but there are those out there who will scream bloody hell seeing things like that.

But nice work, you're getting better, keep on writing :)

Keep updating this!! Please!! There are some typo's...uh can't remember where exaclty, but you may want to look back over it.

So we get so see another aspect of Sage. I have no idea she was a protector of the innocent. Interesting line for work amidst the conflicts the story brings.

The grammar's still an issue but I've dwelled on that long enough. I think you should look over these chapters and work on the run on sentences and misspellings. I'm not saying the story is bad which is isn't. Especially with this chapter, it's real interesting to see how Sage's job affects the story and her personal life.

It's just that the grammar issues take a lot away from the story. In some parts it can be overlooked, but mostly it too apparent to ignore, actually pulling me out of the story more than once. I hope you can work these issues out, and best of luch with this story as you've really caught my interest.