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Reviews For: Fork and Knife

Will Sachiksy 2007-02-18 ch 1,	Quite a moving story. Most of the few linguistic flourishes you had in the story were used effectively, and the ending was exactly what it needed to be. I do have to complain about the premise. You don't have to reveal everything, but please give a more clear explanation of why the Internet was down. Before the last paragraph, I just thought the man was broke and couldn't access a computer anywhere. The sentence "It seemed ridiculous to think that she would still be there, even moreso to think that she would think that he was; but again hope was the only thing that hadn’t left the world" is awkward. There are a few other awkward wordings the in the story you may want to revise. Other than that, well done. By the way, nice Shadow of the Colossus reference.
Sakka-Fenikkusu 2007-01-30 ch 1,	God, that's amazing. Once again, I'm stunned by your brilliance. I wish I could find something to critisize, but I haven't discovered anything as of yet. So just remind yourself you're leagues better than me and go on with your merry day. Sakka-Fenikkusu
firewitch1soulwriter 2007-01-13 ch 1,	Honey, that's so sad it makes me want to cry. If you think about it many people really don't know what they have until they can't have it. -Britt
Royal Bliss 2007-01-12 ch 1,	I'm not a big fan of internet relationships but this piece was pretty interesting considering it was about that. It was kind of strange though that the girls(or at least he thought it was) front door was unlocked though. But other than that, nice work. Makes me want to break into Best Buy..

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