This was another exciting chapter, you really have a good way with your words, the description was very vivid. You also have very graphic images in this chapter, however they do not exceed good taste. Well done, I look forward to reading more.

This is a good start you have here, I really like what you have to far. I'm very intrigued by the mystery in your story. I would like to recommend however, that you add more suspense and drama to the story, it has the potential to be really scarey, and could be with a bit more susupense and perhaps description. I'm also curious as to why the forest was once safe and now suddenly it is not. But all and all I really enjoyed it. I look forward to reading more. cady