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Reviews For: Matchbook

hateandkill-D 2007-03-30 ch 2,	abuseboring? ha, try gripping! I loved it! he sounds so cool! LOL! can't wait to read more!
JJSLAM2129 2007-03-30 ch 2,	abuseI know it's only the first two chapters, but I really can't see where you intend to go with the plot. So far, all I see is one very angry pyromaniac who lights things up as a joke or when provoked. The chapters by themselves might be okay as one shots but for an actual story, you're going to need an actual plot. Second off, there's a whole lots of misspellings. For example 'extenuster' is barely even close to the correct spelling 'extinguisher'. You tend to use the word 'defiantly', which means to challenge something agressively. You probably mean 'definitely' which means certainly. Other words? "Apreciated", "criticism", "possible". My suggestion would be to look it over with a spell checker and if you can help it, read the chapter over before you post it. At this point, the story can go anywhere so I'll leave you to it. You asked for blunt and honest.
XxParalaixX 2007-03-30 ch 2,	abuseYay, freako! You go get 'em, Jac! :P :P :P Xx-Bex-xX
RosyGirl123 2007-02-22 ch 1,	abuseWow….I’m speechless. This is soo crazy! But I loved it. I’m a pyro and I love stories about sadistic and crazy people. I loved this story, it was amazing! I wish there was more.
XxParalaixX 2007-02-13 ch 1,	abuseScary... could you explain it to me? I don't quite understand- all the same, it is very well written.
DarkMoonRevenge 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseWow, that was awesome. I'm a bit of a pyro, so I loved this story even that much more. I like the way you describe everything. It was...different. I can't find anything to correct, so I guess I'm out of things to say. Keep writing crazy stuff like this!
Rose Warne 2007-01-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseJaw drop. COOL! If being a "regenerator" refers to the fact this boy can regenerate almost faster than the match can burn, I'd like to see what happens to him outside of his room. Of course, I'm probably just clueless of the outside world and "regenerator" is talking about something totally different. I'm really sorry, but I can't think of anything to nit-pick! (A first for me.) I love descriptive language, and your story has such good language I was hooked from first word to last. Believe me, I only review to people who are awesome writers. Such a good tactic, too, misspelling "appreciated" in the summary to hook in the grammar freaks! It worked on me... Sorry again there's nothing to brutalize, save your A/Ns which need some capitalization.
Qzie 2007-01-19 ch 1,	abuseOh dear. What goes on in your head? ...Rhetorical. :) That was one of the most sadistic things I've ever read, and I was thoroughly creeped out. So, I have nothing left to say but... Brilliant.
hateandkill-D 2007-01-12 ch 1,	abuseCOOL! heehe, luv this!
V-Hip 2007-01-12 ch 1,	abuseInteresting... A few awkward sentences that need some ironing out, and the transition to the description is rather forced. Also, does the character actually think he's talking/thinking to someone else? If not, then the "and you thought I wasn't going to need it" doesn't need explanation, as it's pretty obvious he's just thinking to himself. Other than that, well written and quite intriguing. I especially like the description of the flame's progress. The language there really flows, except in the few awkward sentences mentioned above.

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