I love how this was written. Great story idea. Please update soon.

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it is very good story ,I enjoyed a lot

awesome! i dont really get the storyline but i love it!

Thats a good story lots of action i have a question could you help me with my story i'm not far but i need help it's found at Also i have a question how to you edit alredy submitted chapters. Because i would like to add and fix my chapter one.

alsome story i like it yet there is some spelling errors other than that its pretty good!

Great way to start the book, though I recommend putting a little more detail into and between the story taking place. Other than that, great job, can't wait to read more.

Just a few spelling mistakes and some grammar mishaps, but other than that very interesting plot. I'm ready for the next part!

signed,

Adrian

Very interesting beginning. I'm anxious to see where this goes.