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| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-01-15 ch 1, | abuseWow, there are certainly a lot of names thrown around in this poem. (Okay, two isn't a lot, but you know what I mean.) I love the bit about an Indian pressing his ear to hot rocks. Such a great visual and nice comparison. This piece is strangely deep. Keep writing! :) |
| boys kiss girls 2007-01-12 ch 1, | abuselosing the remote is cause for pandemonium (i like that word... pandemonium) in our house. I like how you made it a bit more creative than just "we lost the remote but we're too lazy to change the channel manually". quite humorous. good job. |