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no.peace.los.angeles
2007-01-15
ch 1,
abuseWow, there are certainly a lot of names thrown around in this poem. (Okay, two isn't a lot, but you know what I mean.) I love the bit about an Indian pressing his ear to hot rocks. Such a great visual and nice comparison. This piece is strangely deep. Keep writing! :)
boys kiss girls
2007-01-12
ch 1,
abuselosing the remote is cause for pandemonium (i like that word... pandemonium) in our house. I like how you made it a bit more creative than just "we lost the remote but we're too lazy to change the channel manually". quite humorous. good job.
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