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| 0.0 NightRiders 0.0 2008-07-01 ch 6,  | abuseand why have you stopped? awesome story, plese dont stop, this story is truly amazing, BUT there is absolutely ONE thing i hate about your outlook in the characters. Because you built up riley to be a strong girl, her crumbling at the sight of jacob is sickening. And it doesnt really suit well with the development. She should be defiant, shtrog yet intelligent with a twist - unpredictable most would say but shes not and that is concerning I am just a helpful critic, and i urge you to continue because this story is truly amazing youre awesome ciao Samantha X |
| shiboo 2007-10-04 ch 6, | abusei wonder why it to me so long to find this story (oh well) it was very funny keep writing |
| chibichoco 2007-07-21 ch 6, | abuseOh! I really love your story. Please continue it. I am sorry that I have not reviewed earlier. Please please continue it! I will wait for your next update anxiously. Yeah XD |
| blckrose89 2007-06-14 ch 6, | abuseI hope you post more on this soon. I've fallen in love with your characters. This is a great story and I hope you realize that. |
| Deaths Creed 2007-04-23 ch 6, | abuseIt's an... interesting story, to say the least, I like it, it's just different. I think that it'd be really intresting to see it go from here, I have the oddest ideasfor the future of this story. I kinda see Riley going off and leaving Wren for a guy, bt I doubt that would happen... hm, I'll think on this... |
| all you need is oxygen. 2007-04-23 ch 6, | abuseThe beginning chapter seemed a bit... unfinished, sort of like half the explanations were missing, but you cleared it up in the later chapters. This is a really touching & interesting story, good work on formulating such realistic characters! Jacob seems to be bipolar or something, heh. It's almost freaky how his personality can change so randomly, but that makes it all the better! Congrats on this fabulous story! |
| Deaths Creed 2007-04-22 ch 4, | abuseHey,I like the story, I gotta read the rest later, but so far its really good. ^^ I'll reveiw later! |
| Sy Itha 2007-04-22 ch 6, | abuseI really like this story and where you're going with it. Update soon! |
| Jane 2007-04-10 ch 5, anon. | abusecontinue? |
| Amanda 2007-04-02 ch 5, anon. | abuseOMG... i love this story... PLEASE update... ^_^ |
| Rei Inaki 2007-03-16 ch 5, | abusethis story...WOW. That's the only word I can find for it. I would really like to see this updated soon so, please update soon? Please? I would hate for such a good story to wither and die away. |
| TheAngelofhope 2007-02-16 ch 1, | abuseI enjoyed this. Keep up the good work. |
| ScarletNeko 2007-02-13 ch 3, | abuseI like it, but it tends to drag a little I think... Maybe fluxuations in sentance structure or something. but otherwise, very nice. Waititng for updates. ~arigato |
| bloodyfangs 2007-01-23 ch 3, | abuseGood chapter! I cant believe she gave in... Loved the quote. Keep up the good work! |
| You Xin 2007-01-20 ch 3, anon. | abusehm, what can I say? Your stories are really interesting! |