It's so cute!

aww
oh my god
so sweet
i love this - its so sweet..
oh and ive been meaning to ask you
WHAT HAPPENED TO THE SEQUEL OF CUPIDS WOLF?
awesome story - really

Short and sweet. Made me go "Aww!" at the end. Good job! :D

OMG! so cute

beginning isnt vcery good... you should try showing instead of telling that she's ur best friend, really close, yada yada..

othere than that, very sweet and would totally make a good anime short film. =]]

i love this one it's my favorite for some reason...

Aw... this was so beautiful! It was very well written, and so much different from other stories I've read on here. ^-^

AUGH! too fast i wanted a longer one!
gr! now im angry! But i have to read the next one *eye twitches*!

-A Cupid's Wolf Addict

I am never one to try and criticize someone's work, especially since my own work is full of horrid writing and grammar. Lol, but I must say I really enjoyed your piece of work here love.

Well done, and I hope to see more from you

~Absinthe

That is possibly the cutest thing I've ever read. Love your writing, great job. One comment, you've got a typo (I think) 'I knew she probably would let me into the house if I went over there'. I think it should be 'wouldn't let me in'. Other than that I've got nothing. :)

~Tasyin

The summary is meant to say what the story is about.

The language is nice and varied, the descriptions short, but say much.

The story is told instead of shown, which makes it boring. I say, but the first paragraph (who cares?!) and describe instead of blurting. Example: "gave me a curious look". How does that look like?

"I rolled my eyes and we walked home." HUH? That just sounded...wtf? It sounds like I normally speak. And you know what others do when I speak like that? They're so surprised that they laugh. It makes sense but then it doesn't.

The grammar, tenses and spelling are awesome. Cookie points for mechanics!

"We talked about our day and how much we hated teachers, but mostly we speculated about the white camellia. Violet was of the opinion that it was all a prank by one of the boys. I wasn’t so sure." Another example of telling instead of showing. Sounds like blablabla in my head.

The story tells everything to the reader, leaves nothing to their imagination. It makes the story lack suspense, which is what makes a reader want to read on. I don't know, maybe not telling who the flower was from or something like that would make it more interesting?

The theme is very sweet and cute, very...yuri hahaha. I like it. It's very tender. Good job.