I like this. You said you have a hard time writing in poetry format, but the great thing about poetry is that you can make your OWN format. You've got nice flow and good job showing emotion here. I'd love to know more about this black angel if this is going to be a recurirng character.

This is poem has great imagery, and voice. During your end author's note be careful with your spelling (I do it a lot too :]) I hope you post something else soon. I'd love to see more. Also: you say you have no true poetry format, but this has it's own rhythm. Find it again and you'll be able to write whenever you want at any time of the day. Keep up the good work!

Watch typos: Multiple times you say "angle" instead of 'angel'.

Not bad poetry. It is succint in its theme; but the very succictness is some times too simple for this to be good yet. It's too clean, blemishless in imagery, for an intense subject.

"In yet he’s not pure evil." 'In yet'? Do something to clarify this; I'd get rid of the 'In'.

"Darkness flowing through his veins" is rather cliché. If you think of something different or more specific to say what evil the angel is trying to be rid of, it will also lend to his characterization.

The third stanza is good for impact.

" Hush little one don’t worry" sounds like it needs a comma between "one" and "don't". That and the last line lend a nice uplift of hope to this. The emotion is there--work on getting the words to be more creative.

yay. you posted something before i did. good job. i can't wait for more poetry.

when writing poetry it is not a necessary to use a particular format. I personal rarely if ever do. Keep writing and posting because I like where this is going.