It says that this is complete, so I might be making a complete a** out of myself by assuming that it is. I'd really like you to continue (if you weren't already planning on it).

That was very cute; I'd love to see how this story progresses, because it seemed to have a lot of potential. I really like how you've still kept the element of suspense here -- revealing too much (or everything) in the first chapter is a fatal mistake a lot of writers seem to do on here.

That last line was perfect, by the way. But the summary says P. Charming doesn't want Pr. Perfect... and in the story it says she snatched P. Charming's eye from Pr. perefct... and she's obviously not perfect (= Cinderella), so either he changes and turns out to be P. Charming or... there's someone else! (Bow at my superior skills of deduction.)

Or maybe I'm totally wrong! :o

Either way, I'd love to see more of this. Please continue soon!