no offence but its confusing+boring.n wats muse?

Haha... not bad. A humorous interpretation of death is always healthy.

My only suggestion is sort of ambiguous and not-very-helpful, but I'd reccommend stretching it out a bit more. It has a very good pace up 'til the climax, at which point everything becomes a little rushed, in my opinion. I'm often wrong. :) Some history on the negativity of the name could be included, too. Just a thought. ^_^

You've keen ability in the realm of imagery. The descriptions summon mental scenery of crystal clarity, the dialouges are realistic and well-enacted. Marvelous talents.

I give it a nine out of ten. ^_^

I really liked this story. the plot and the way you wrote it was very good.

not bad