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| smile for the sunshine 2008-02-24 ch 1,  | abusethe rhythm was flawless, the poem heartbreaking. the rhymes didn't seem forced because of the shortness of the lines. it seemed genuinely. beautifully written. the only thing i can think of to criticise would be the double spacing. if you click shft enter while spacing the lines, it should get rid of that for you. good work. ps. here with the review marathon. check the link on my profile if you're interested. |
| im.a.werewolf.rawr. 2008-01-26 ch 1, | abuseaww... that's so sad. Beautifully written. And it rhymes too! nice work! |
| Blissfully Sarcastic 2007-12-08 ch 1, | abuseGood piece. I liked it. Some of the rhyming seemed a little forced, /but/--overall--it was a good read. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseSweet poem. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| SirScott 2007-09-10 ch 1, | abuseThat's so sad to be alone on a rainy day. Good poem though. ~SirScott |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-07-27 ch 1, | abuseSo sad yet elgantly abstract. You never fail to capture me with your very beautiful yet tragic images. I'm going to add this to my faves. Well done... -C.N |
| Ramenluver 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseSounds like one of my freinds. I think you did a good job in capturing the emotion. -Ramen |
| SpeedingCars8 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseaw i liked this one a lot. i love the structure of your poetry. and you're rhyming doesn't ruin the writing either. it flows nicely and doesn't make it sound sort of cheesy. great work!! |
| RaindropsOnBlackRoses 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseNow that I've mainly been into writing poems that don't rhyme, I find ones that do rhyme almost cheesy. I just mean that sometimes when people rhyme, they make it sound like they're only rhyming because they have to. But you made this rhyme and still sound sad and not cheesy at all. I really liked it! |
| Methuselah Renard 2007-06-20 ch 1, | abuseVery simple, yet very moody. Good effect. This looks similar to what too many unfortunate kids must go through, suffering home alone while parents work endless hours. |
| sarah (aka silently watchin... 2007-06-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseaw...sad |
| The Reverse Edge Blade 2007-05-02 ch 1, | abuseSo emotional, so powerful. Another poem that I'll remember for long. It was hard to read it, since it was so sad, but it was really beautiful. This'll go in my favorites, so much emotion. The Reverse Edge Blade |
| keringo 2007-04-02 ch 1, | abusegreat job once again. full of emotions. really nice. |
| soccerfreak18 2007-03-14 ch 1, | abuseWell writen, nothing seems forced. good job keep up the good work! |
| ten pts above average 2007-03-13 ch 1, | abuseWOW :] |