I really, really liked this story, it rocked my socks off, very original, short, but, it was perfect in it's shortness, loved every moment of the reading. Scary concept. I've got a zombie story pending myself, so, check it out please? :) And again, awesome writing.

You're a very good writer, and I think this read well the whole way through. Funny, I don't like gore, but I like zombie fics... the suspense, the figuring out how to survive... that's what I like.

Sad... poor Sophie.

Heh, this was quite an amazing read, your perspectiv eof it is incredibly unique. God I love zombie fiction. Your grammar was great; obviously time and effort was put into revision. With one-shots, you have to, I mean its one thing to do a huge story with some mild spelling errors, but when its one chapter, you gotta watch it. It becomes more noticable. But you did a great job making everything flow.

I liked the ending. Shows how swiftly the change occurs and how sickly subtle it is. This story is just, incredible. I could never master the oneshots, so grand job there.

-Stewey

I liked your story, especially the first couple paragraphs. I suck at giving writing advice, but I guess I could try. Your story had some minor grammar problems, nothing too major though. I am sure you'll be able to fix that on your own. Part of your story, especially the part toward the middle, read more like a summary. I don't really know how to explain it, other than it just moved a long a little too fast and abrupt.

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this story. Keep writing!