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| effervescent-sentiments 2007-08-28 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful last line. I didn't care for the rhyming, but the overall premise was . . . celestial. :) I commend you! Julia. |
| DiaRose 2007-08-04 ch 1, | abuseThis one may be my favorite. You took such a simple idea and you made it sound really beautiful and you gave it a lot of meaning. Love, ~Dia |
| AK the Twilight 2007-01-22 ch 1, | abuseYou truly possess brilliant imagery. The word choices you make feel completely new; you don't seem to recycled phrases. Although you stated some of the lines similarly in thought (the concepts felt recycled, mostly at the start) but you kept the imagery escalating until the climactic ending. It's great to see a focus on imagery, and this is a great poem. If you can make the beginning imagery stronger, this will be better. All in all, it's a beautifully emotional poem. Excellent job. |
| Dani P 2007-01-21 ch 1, | abusegreat poem like the idea behind it, very unique |