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| andfound815 2007-01-17 ch 1,  | abuseAh! Write more! I liked this a lot... now, I could be naive, or uneducated, or something, but are naga and nagini actual things from mythology, or did you take that from the name of the snake in Harry Potter? And... I guess they're not snakes, are they? Cause... "Black claws scraped across the darkened metal of Apep's flute." Don't tell me what they are, cause I want to figure it out myself. Good work! A little dialogue-heavy, but that's ok. |