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| RodeoGirl 2008-08-07 ch 1,  | abuseI know that this was written over a year ago, but the Lord never leaves us. He just works in his own time. I hope everything worked out! Good poem, this was written from the heart. |
| An Apple Bleeds At Twilight 2008-02-10 ch 1, | abuseI liked this piece. Very well expressed and the lines: "Left in a lion’s den/Left like bait for Satan" were really good. Overall this piece was well writted and easy to relate to. Good job! - An Apple Bleeds At Twilight |
| D. A. Emme 2007-03-14 ch 1, | abuseWow! Good figurative language. This is a really good poem, and I can really relate to it. I've been there when it feels that God's ignoring me. I like the line, "Left like bait for Satan." Good poem. Just remember, God -is- indeed there, just it's hard to find him in a rocky storm sometimes. The picture isn't always clear. He's there. -heart- |
| TylerB 2007-03-12 ch 1, | abuseSuch a haunting poem here. I mean what's worse than feeling abandoned by your one true hope? The last line is an amazing ending to the peice. There is so much power in the name and the way the say it, as if pleading for help. Amazing |
| Smiling Serenade 2007-03-08 ch 1, | abuseTook your advice- erh, major hint -and read more of your work. Personally I love this. This was exactly what I was going through. Just so you know, I'm doing terrific right now. Have been for about a month. Today was great. I was just FULL of ... joy and peace. And happiness, too. : ) I wish the same for you. And when days come that you don't feel those, remember that love, most important of all, is still there. Loved this. I should upload some more optimistic poems. I feel rather "up" right now. It's the moments that God reassure you, when He knows you're about to give up. Life's all about ups and downs, no? Don't give up on love. -the one and only Miss Letti. |
| anna 2007-02-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseyou seem to be forgetting that people (like me) are here for you! but good poem. ( i think it's satan not saten lol) |
| MacabreDivinity 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuseQuite the emotional plea. While the rhymes are somewhat simple, and the "Saten" word is ... curious, my heart does go out to the sentiment behind this piece. We all have moments of desperation and question. Faith is, unfortunately, easier to lose than to gain. You've shown strength just by trying to find words to express this. Personal expression can be one of the greatest spiritual healers, you know? As for the poem itself, as I said, the rhymes are a bit simple, and short. While getting they get the point across, it does feel like this could be a lot more as a poem. Either way, though, what matters is that the message is from your heart. Poetry should be something with your heart that you expound upon with your mind. Perhaps, in this case, your spirit. I'm sure a lot of people will relate to this, and hopefully, it will inspire positive reinforcement. It helps to know you're not completely alone in wavering strength. If you ask me, none truly are. Heh. |
| Needa S 2007-01-29 ch 1, | abuseIf you look deep into your heart you may see that Jesus is carrying you through your troubles and trials. He will never abandant us but Satan wants you to believe He will. Sad message and I hope you feel better soon. Nicely written. God Bless and write on. |
| B.T. Lines 2007-01-19 ch 1, | abuseUgg, sounds like your life is rotten right now. I hope everything starts to get better, and remember that no matter how it feels god will never forsake or abandon you! |