Very very touching story. You have a good style, and it shows because the words just seem to flow as you read them. It shows that you put a lot of work into this. Good job, because this was amazing to read.

As I was reading your story I noticed one sentence that was a touch awkward. "I walked home alone, my friends live miles away." I would be a 'because' after the comma. If do not, that sentence is a run-on. Also watch out- you have a few fragments here and there that take away from the whole effect of the image that you create.

Again- congrats! Good job bella! C'est tres tres bien. Je l'aime bien P. Bonnce chance, and thanks for the review! I hope to read more of your stories short and long in the future.