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| Hed in the Cloudz 2008-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseI like your writing especially much in this story. You're both showing and telling, and writing like in an actual novel-- doing it better than some published authors, too! (Not that that's truly a compliment, once you've read some of the crap that's out there...) So I guess my big issue with this story is how it ends the way it does. I guess that the end itself is necessary, but this seems like a stretch. Why on earth would they lock only one stall, and a middle stall at that? It would make more sense if they just washed off the messages-- anything but randomly deciding to lock one stall! --Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile!) |
| diamondforever 2008-01-16 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this. Strong and realistic. |
| ColdCoffeeEyes25 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseThere's a bathroom stall where I go to college that's like that. My favorite line: "I'm in love with her and I don't care who knows it." Hey, we should communicate with each other any way we can, right? Great story. |
| guess who's back babies 2007-12-26 ch 1, | abuseoh man. That was sad. :( The ending was great though. I'd love to see what happened between the two of them, but this story just doesn't seem to support an extention. Good job. |
| urbansecret 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abusegood stuff! |
| k 2007-08-25 ch 1, anon. | abusethat was cool. |
| Kitty Cat Turtle 2007-07-31 ch 1, | abuseThat was REALLY good. *bows to you* |
| Always Pencil 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abuseThat was crazy. You should have extended this. |
| Sporkless 2007-07-16 ch 1, | abuseThis story feels so real, and it's very well written. Even after it was over I yearned to read more. ^-^ |
| danielle 2007-07-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseouch... cool really cool. like me but it was my fault. i was too shy to approach this girl who was my classmate then i shifted courses..now i may never see her again. |
| Kamikoko 2007-06-20 ch 1, | abuseAw. That's depressing... If that'd have been me... Urgh. I'd be depressed beyond depressed. Extremely well-written. Heart-wrenching. |
| Shamathelama 2007-05-12 ch 1, | abuseHi I really enjoyed this one, as for the doubts it arises and a girl being in love with another one who she has never known in person, nor talked, nothing. Great. |
| Niki Lemonade 2007-05-03 ch 1, | abuseWow. This was very...I don't know how to describe it. It just...felt so honest and real. I loved this. Partly because I go into the bathroom and wonder about how awesome it would be if one of my friends would pop in there, we'd share laughs, and maybe a beautiful little kiss and it'd be the start of a wonderful sweet romance...man am I glad I'm not the only one who does that! ~Lemons |
| Asylum Gates 2007-04-16 ch 1, | abusea beautiful story... nearly brought me to tears, reminding me of similar experiences of my own... on my favourites. beautiful story. |
| dollface and her cancer 2007-04-12 ch 1, | abusethe kind of love story that leaves you craving fulfillment, and knowing, sometimes, it's not in the cards. |