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| Silver.Outlaw 2008-05-14 ch 1,  | abuseI wanted to cry (actually my tears were running down my cheeks) but my family would have asked what was wrong and I would have had to admit that a story made me cry. The last quarter of the story really pulled at my heart strings especially the line, "Daddy… Daddy, I don’t want to die. I’m not ready. I want to watch Monday Night Football again. Daddy, please don’t go…" The tears came in waves. I read it again, more tears, yeah. My dad and I are close and I always called him Daddy, not Dad, for the past 17 1/2 years and it made that connection with me which is really what makes a story great. Even though I obviously have no experience with that kind of situation I can relate to their relationship. Wonderfully sad and heart-wrenching story. I wasn't feeling the emotion in the first half until I found my connection but that's just me. ~Kristina |
| abyssgirl 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseexcuse me while i go and cry... *cries* it's SAD... :( |
| Lily Llynn 2007-11-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is really really good. I like how it's told in the POV of the unconscious, about-to-die victim, rather than her family. I like the little things that only family members would know, like the Rex story. I think you captured the emotion quite well, but it's not quite raw enough. But this is still really good! (: |
| HurtSoGood 2007-05-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseI honestly cried reading this. Well I cry a lot, but still.. :-) congratulations on an amazing story! |
| Dreaming One 2007-03-23 ch 1, | abuseVery disturbing. Good job! I found it almost hard to believe, because it seemed like the accident had just occurred...wouldn't they have waited longer? That's the only criticism I have for it. Quite heartbreaking! Keep writing! --May |
| Larentia 2007-03-23 ch 1, | abuseAww. That's so sad. And yes, that was definitely a reference to "Can You Keep A Secret?" --> I thought the scene in that book was SO funny and wanted to incorporate it in my own way. Haha, I'm so hapy someone caught onto that. |
| Raen Shadows 2007-02-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat is so sad! I teared up when she gets cut off. Very cool take on life support though, and I like how you left the after realm to everyone's own imagination and beliefs. This is incredibly well written. Superb story! Raen |
| Vanilla Bean CEO 2007-01-19 ch 1, | abusethis is really quite sad I like it |