Short and sweet. The poem was awsome. Keep writing.

I really like this. The rhyming scheme really appeals to me, for some reason, and I love the four lines that stand out: 'And she died while you muttered/ 'I'm going outside'', and 'And you died while the air muttered/ 'Goodbye''. I like the repetition of sorts, and the connection between the narrator and 'her', death and the air. It's just a lovely sad, sweet poem, and I like that it's not long in length, it means that the feelings hit you harder.

Very dark. A bit short for m taste but I think making it longer would ruin the effect anyway. Glad to see your still writing. As always I wish you well.
-TheFool