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| FeralShadowwolf 2007-09-15 ch 1,  | abusewow. this was breathtaking. i love the lines 'i ask myself a question before i kiss myself goodbye' and the final two lines. this poem has a terrific rhythm, and rhyming scheme which doesn't feel forced. wish i could do that. you're very talented. never waste what makes you special. Feral xx |
| in theory 2007-03-27 ch 1, | abuseI read your bio (I was wondering what you think about dyslexic people etc..? but that's besides the point). I like rhyme too. And rhythm. This is morbid, but weirdly upbeat because of the cotinuous rhythm. I'd like to see it broken up from ABAB; ABCABC is a fun format for morbid poems I find. nice job :-) |
| Dante's Disciple 2007-02-23 ch 1, | abuseBrilliant in a sad depressing kind of way =) The rhymes here are good and it flows perfectly! |
| Harley Morgan 2007-01-28 ch 1, | abuseThis was nice. Depressing, but nice. Good Job! |
| Odds In Favor. 2007-01-20 ch 1, | abuseOmg sad sad sad sad sad. D: Love the third to last line, hehe. Yeah it's kinda horrible to think of how badly they're treated. Girls in gangs must be a real issue in Montreal, and to think it's only been really focused on this year in school. xD Your poem's really gonna touch everyone. If the art is as beautiful as the poem is, then I can't wait to see it. ~ Snowglobe |