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| simpleplan13 2007-02-25 ch 1, | I like this... the ending is powerful... I like it a lot.. a tad reepy and well written |
| Nemonus 2007-01-21 ch 1, | lol, it's a common illogical phobia I guess. You don't do anything to explain your fear in this one, but that comes out in how the 'lifelessness' is what you emphasize. The rhyme and words in this are ok. |
| WickedSilence 2007-01-21 ch 1, | I like how you tie together dolls with a little girl's best friend. The connection between viciousness and seeming innocence is different in my mind, though truthfully the beginning struck me as slightly paranoid before I got further into the poem. The writing is simple, yet that isn't a turn away, it adds to the simplistic fear present in each line while making reference to the old "Truth from the mouths of babes". Nice piece. |