Wow. What an interesting way to describe a puff of smoke. I love the imagery you put into this poem. Absolutely wonderul.
~meg~

Amazing! This is going on my favorite's list. You described things expertly, it is like I can feel the drag you were taking.

nice word-play and inter-woven rhyme. very descriptive.

Normally I'd dismiss this poem as being too wordy--but you've managed to pull this style off with flair. The imagery is wonderful (though smoking probably isn't the best habit to get into). I loved the flow.

always write on!