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| Dehydrated Hyena 2007-06-21 ch 1,  | abuseJust beautiful. And the formatting works really well! It actually helps convey the emotions, the way it creates pauses and all. Interesting parallel with the stutter. Well done. |
| boys kiss girls 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuseI love the feeling you get from this. Almost like it was just a passing fancy but it could also be meant to show that you are sad about not remembering what was special. It's funny or sad. Or both. At the same time. I also liked the flow of the second sentence of the second stanza. Especially the word "synch". Good job. |
| the.pink.life 2007-02-02 ch 1, | abuseThat is such an incredibly evocative and poignant poem. I love the thought of feeling a heartbeat in fingers. That is wonderful. Just lovely. Keep writing! :) |
| Elenive 2007-01-27 ch 1, | abuse"There was something special about that moment, but I can’t remember anymore." Those lines almost broke my heart. Perfect finish. Also, the idea of feeling one's heartbeat in one's fingers works very well. It's the feeling of almost not being able to grasp what's happening. Great piece. |