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Sakura0890 2009-12-03 . chapter 6
"'...And honestly, I don’t care if your sick - it’s your own goddamn fault on that one, too.' Candace growled." Shouldn't it be Britt who is growling?

Well I hope that you haven't COMPLETELY given up on this story because people haven't left reviews for you. Again, this is a really great story. Please update it sometime soon and keep up the great work!!
Sakura0890 2009-12-03 . chapter 5
They are in high school so of course their, or in Candance's case, first first sexual experience would be awkward. I hate to think about what she would have done with Jerome if he hadn't had a condom.
Sakura0890 2009-12-03 . chapter 4
I wonder why this story hasn't gotten more reviews than it has. I mean this is really good. I can definitely see this happening to someone.
write25 2007-05-21 . chapter 6
sweet! Sorry it's taken me so long. Good chapter, very dynamic. I liked all of the.. yelling. It was interesting to read. and of course now I'm really interested to know what's wrong with her! Got some theories but i'll have to wait until you post more to see if i'm right! Keep up the great work. ~Mariah
And-on-Anonymous 2007-04-16 . chapter 6
OK, this is a good story, i'm surprised you haven't got more reviews yet... You might want to give a bit more of the main characters emotional side of things- but obviously that is up to you and find all of the swapping between loads of characters a little confusing at times, sometimes it's best to keep the numbers down- it's ess complicated. Otherwise i think this is good, you've got an emotionally complicated situation- she doesn't relaly know what she wants and it is quite realistic in that sense. I'd keep it up :)
If you don't want con crit then just say, cos i know not all authors like it...
guu-sama 2007-04-11 . chapter 6
I've enjoyed what you've written so far, so please keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next chapter. Cheers! :)
write25 2007-03-16 . chapter 5
That was hot and awkward at the same time. This chapter was very interesting, I had a good time reading it. Keep up the good work. ~Mariah
And-on-Anonymous 2007-03-16 . chapter 5
Good- i think you got her awkward feelings quite well afterwards! Looking forward to the next chapter.
write25 2007-02-03 . chapter 2
I loved this story the first time around, and its so good to see it back. I think this was my favorite chapter before. I adore the characters, they're so real, not cardboard cut outs that everyone uses. I'm curious to know if Sheri not being well has a purpose other than this scene, if i read too far into that or not. meh, anyways. keep up the good work. ~Mariah
Islandgyal2004 2007-01-23 . chapter 2
Update soon
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