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| Monochrome Lovers 2007-01-24 ch 1,   | 1) first sentence, is "her" supposed to be "here"? 2) second sentence, there should be an "it" before "isn't" 3) "Hold me as if I'm glass" good line. 4) second to last line, "it was" should be "they were" Over all, good poem. The speaker doesn't want to be disappointed. Even if it means giving up on love before it begins. good job. |