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Namahagetecno 2008-06-30 ch 5,	abuseAnother excellent chapter, each of the characters stands out in their own way.
Namahagetecno 2008-06-29 ch 4,	abuseThats so sad, I hope they patch things up.
Namahagetecno 2008-06-28 ch 3,	abuse...Wow! That was an awesome plot twist.
Namahagetecno 2008-06-28 ch 2,	abuseThis chapter was really good to!
Namahagetecno 2008-06-27 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is really good! But maybe a little too dark for me, so I probably won't read it that quickly, but I definitely will get around to it!
KnittingKneedle 2008-05-28 ch 2,	abuseThe change in tone of the second chapter is tangible, but I'm afraid I'm just not buying Jade as an assasin, stripper yes, assasin no. Theres a part where you describe all the labels a character is wearing in your description of them, I hate when names are dropped in, and you might call me a fashion retard but I can recognise if a dress is blue, but not if it's gucci from just one glance...I think designer is sufficent in establishing a character. I'm not sure I like Jade's reaction to what's happening to her, surely you'd be a little more weirded out by it? still, it's an interesting premise
Asherah Seirei 2008-05-27 ch 1,	abuseWell, I have to say, it certainly is different from all the other stories I've read. Far more mature, I'd say. You have a real feel for the world your characters live in, and their situations, and their dialog. You capture it well. I think I could see this happening. Your characters seem very realistic. Very loud and outgoing too, they make bold statements with everything they say. Their relationships between one another are well defined too, so I'd say good job there. =^^=
Lady Mikalia 2008-05-03 ch 18,	abuseI loved this. This was really cool; love the concept of 'sub-humans' and how their abilities vary. Good job.
Trunks sxy 2008-04-30 ch 1,	abuseWow :D When I started reading this, I wasn't sure I'd like it, but I got to the end of the first chapter and it's brilliant :) Unique's my favourite character, and I really hope she becomes a big part as the story progresses :) I did notice a typo ("as she sand Patti Labelle's hit song Lady Marmalade" - as she sang) but everyone gets them so it's not such a biggie. And I laughed at the line "the rest is too explicit for even this narrator to describe. Let's just say, Jade walked away with 50,0 dollars that night" I'ma read on :D
theflyingcrabsareeatingmyha... 2008-02-25 ch 1,	abuseHey, this story is great! Yeah, I know, I'm only on the first chapter, but I'm definitely enjoying it. Ahh...gotta go...just wanted to be able to mark the story to come back to...;)
moonlight.dream 2007-12-19 ch 1,	abuseThis story seems really interesting. The first chapter really drew me in and left me with a lot of questions, which I'm hoping will get answered in the following chapters. Right now, I am intrigued by Unique's character and hope that she develops as the story progresses. I love the rising drama... revolving around the guy named Kevin. I saw one unintentional grammar mistake that can be easily fixed. You had written, "as she sand Patti Labelle's hit song Lady Marmalade," and I think you meant to type "as she sang." I'm definitely going to finish reading this story. =)
Imalefty 2007-11-23 ch 6,	abuseinteresting concept... green blood cells that allow people to access their mind... i would suggest writing out the numbers (ie... "seven" instead of 7) but that's just my personal preference. also, you need "percent" after "100" - otherwise, it sounds like she has 100 brains. XD still, your dialogue is a little unnatural feeling... i don't quite know why. it seems a little stiff or fake if you know what i mean. spike's reason for giving her powers was a little disappointing... i was hoping for something more exciting than converting her to christianity... =\ oh well. i think this chapter is better than most of the previous chapters... keep writing! -Lefty
Crimson xTear 2007-11-20 ch 18,	abuseAwe, it's over!? God dammit! sigh Well, as long as you get that sequel up soon, I guess...that will be soon, right?
Nonya Soum 2007-11-11 ch 18,	abuseWonderful ending. Can't wait for the sequel. Awesome job overall! Write on!
swfan34 2007-11-07 ch 1,	abuseNot my kinda stuff, so I won't finnish reading, but you have some talent. The writing is very good! the characters have backstories, which I can NOT say for most of the fiction on this site that I read. Continue, by all means, I just don't like this type of story. If you focused more on the whole assasin aspect, I might be more interested. But don't change it for me! Just do what the other reviewers want.

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