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| Angelhacker 2008-05-28 ch 1,  | abuseI was suspecting it was his father the entire time! But at first I though the boy was a girl for a few moments until that was all cleared up. It was awesome that I was right for once! Good story, keep them up! |
| camikaza 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abuseYow^^ I like your story very much, I like the father - thing. Maybe you should have saved the 'dad' thing for the last line of the story or something, but I'm nagging now, and I really like it this way anyway^^ Keep goin' this way!^^ |
| mangatemptresshikaru 2007-11-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh-my-god.I'm new here as a member, but not to the site, and I've never read your story. That was so good! I'm a bit of a pervert according to my friends...they may be right :)! i hope you keep writing!my advice: save the parentheses notes for the end. when you're right in the middle of a hot scene, that's the last thing you want to see!if you put it at the end it gives your readers a chance to cool down :)i suspected the father thing but i love the brother idea, especially since he's a teenager. as i said, keep writing. i'd love to see longer work from you like that. |
| Joricko 2007-11-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou're really good with descriptions!! D< GAH, SO AWESOME! -drools- |
| gerigirl 2007-06-23 ch 1, | abusethat was deep i must say i thought maybe his brother/. Father never came to my mind so you must be a darn good writer to have fooled me that badly. |
| Starlite nightfall:MOO MOO 2007-04-01 ch 1, | abuseI almost didn't review thinking that car ride was like...CHAPTER TWO, or something. ^_^ I LOVE this story. It was a bit confusing at times to read because of some mistakes, but other than that it was GREATNESS...I LIKE YOU.. |
| KumKum 2007-03-29 ch 1, | abuseMan, idk... it was really well written, and hott too... but I was really hoping it was his brother... even if I knew it wasn't going to be... I always predict most any story before I read it... anyway... good job and oh yeah... if ya like that brother fic idea... hehe *wink wink nudge nudge* twins are great too... lol ignore me if you want to... buh bye! ~KumKum~ |
| Achromatopsia 2007-02-16 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I really liked your story a whole lot (though the author's notes after some parts bothered me). I thought that you did a great job with writing this story. It is kind of sad how the good stories are always short... Anyways, the father/son incest was awesome! I think that it is kind of cool that they were sleeping together behind the mom's back. If you ever made the story longer, you sure would have a great plot. Well, that's all I have to say. Keep on writing! :) Achrom |
| Callipygian 2007-01-31 ch 1, | abuseFor being so short it was still really good. As I read this in class I wonder if anyone notices what I am reading ... hehe, I feel dirty. I knew it was incest from father and son from the start ... damn, maybe I've read too much manga ... no that can't be it. Good work! n_n |
| Torin-san 2007-01-23 ch 1, | abusethat was different from wat i've been reading O_O incest rox!! |
| nill 2007-01-23 ch 1, | abuseYo, it's Melissa. suprisingly...that was actually good. O-O I think you watched Papa To Kiss In The Dark one too many times... |
| MlleKathy 2007-01-22 ch 1, | abuseO_O OMIGOD! XD THAT WAS AWESOME! LOL HIS FATHER?! OMIGOD OMIGOD x's 10!! Cute though... =3 ... I hope Seiji isn't OUR character Seiji... ._. If it is that means... Tairou... *screams* DX OMIGOD! ARE YOU SERIOUS?! (lol i'm not really freaking out this much I just put my hands over my mouth and screamed in my head >>) |