Reviews for Princess of the Midnight Sun

Reviews For: Princess of the Midnight Sun

Serj'sLUVER-Yea 2007-12-13 ch 4,	abuseI like it, but I don't long paragraphs, long stories long paragraphs are cool. Maybe you could shorten them a bit? I'll read the story still, it will just sparak a litle more interest, because I just skim threw long paragraphs. I just don't like them, but anyway, COOL! Going to next chapter!
Serj'sLUVER-Yea 2007-12-13 ch 2,	abuseIt's good, It's good. Just one thing, haha, no there is nothing I could critizize about. Hehe, a curse mark, another thing in common with my story. But if I say too much, it will give it away. I'm going to the next chapter now.
Serj'sLUVER-Yea 2007-12-13 ch 1,	abuseI wouldn't know if it sounded like Zelda, I never really cared for Zelda, but I like the story. I had to fight between going to the next cahpter and putting a reply. Hehe, almost what I was gonna say. Your bad guy sounds a lot like my bad guy from my story. His name is Pzycho. They both even wear a hood, that is just too funny. Now, going to the next cahpter.
Windfaerie 2007-07-03 ch 5,	abuseStill great, I can't wait for the next chapter! The flight parts are really good, so keep up the great work.
Evil Minion Number 2 2007-06-05 ch 2,	abuse“Hey! She is awake!” Hey, Link, listen! XD Ok, for one, who was Takara, and what on earth was the Lake of Life? “What is the Lake of Life, and who is this Takara that you all keep speaking of?” she asked with a look of utter confusion on her face. Don’t think you need to say it twice… Bum bum BUM! the plot thickens. Sort of.
Evil Minion Number 2 2007-06-05 ch 1,	abuseWow, she’s sure successful for a 5 year old, if not a little too giving for someone who never learned the basics of sharing. Heh, who would want to be called a minion? Oh, wait… I guess you already knew the similarities between Twilight King and the Twilight Princess... Would highly recommend changing it, or rish trademark issues. Tee hee… Twilight Zone. Oh, I think of the old 50s show. Well over all, a fairly interesting story, though as someone else already said, the excessive explanation marks kind of makes it look childish...
Darq Chinchilla 2007-02-25 ch 2,	abuseNyeh... When you have an important scene, such as the bandit scene, it should have a bit more detailed. It happened so fast that it left me a little confused! Also, the excessive exclamation marks are unecessary. Only one will do the job. And, lastly, when writing numbers, take the time to write the number out if it is under one hundred (five instead of 5, sixty-two instead of 62, etc.). Not doing so distracts from everything else that is happening. In plot, it's rather strong so far save for one spot in the second chapter: Why on earth does Tamber want to kill the Twilight King? From the way you portrayed her, she doesn't really seem intent on revenge, and, because of Takara and the fairies, it doesn't seem that she should be concerned about that curse mark any more. Shouldn't Takara be more concerned about all of those dead souls and shadow beings that will be released at the king's death than the life of one little kid? Overall, kudos for you on an interesting story.
Nasis the Dragon Hunter 2007-01-27 ch 2, anon.	abuseThis is still going good! can't wait for the next chapter!
kage-youkai girl 2007-01-25 ch 2,	abuseThat was cool.I loved it.Please update.Keep up the great work.
Lil' Wanderer 2007-01-25 ch 1,	abuseThis si a very good sart. It should be very interesting. Please hurry and write more because I am anxious to see where this goes. Good job.
Nemonus 2007-01-24 ch 1,	abuseHint: don't use other people's well-known terms. 'Twilight Princess' and 'Twilight Zone' make me think of Zelda and black & white sci-fi, respectively. Despite this mark of uncreativity your prose is good and characterization well described in the first few paragraphs where we meet the kid Tamber. Good setting up the world with the fairy... I want the bandits' attack described...slower. Make it more suspenceful and scary, and then ease in to the close-up scene of the two people. Plot sounds ok. Continue!
November Raine 2007-01-23 ch 1,	abuseHey girlie...it's me...u know...the wierd girl with black hair that is ur friend and goes 2 ur school...RAINE..u remember right?...haha yea u rn't the one with memory probs...neways that was actually pretty good...r u gonna put ur other story on her?
Kage-youkai girl 2007-01-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow.That was cool.I loved it.Can't wait for the next chapter.Keep up the great work.
Nasis the Dragon Hunter 2007-01-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey! Hows it going? This looks really good, and the discriptions are awesomely done(something I can't do). So please, UPDATE SOON!

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