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| SpeedingCars8 2007-07-08 ch 1,  | abusethis poem actually depressed me. it reminds me of a situation i was caught up in. well i still am. just the ex boyfriend stabbing me in the back, making me believe him and then doing something to hurt me again, as usual i think the poem could have done without "our hearts descend", my opinion is that it interrupts the flow of the poem. it's hard to avoid that in a poem that is so short and to the point like this one. the last two lines are sad but very true. great writing. |
| Travis C. Eckert 2007-01-27 ch 1, | abuseA nice poem. Thinking of what will happen. Makes plenty of sense. |