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| Artemis Anderson 2007-12-13 ch 1, | Aw..D: Sad... |
| Aquafied 2007-07-24 ch 2, | you know, this paints a perfect picture of a sweet christian girl that i know except its a boy funny how that works out |
| summerbee 2007-07-15 ch 2, | i have to say, i like the fiction version of this better. the poem seems disjointed and almost too image-filled for one short piece, beautiful images though they are. the prose piece itself is lovely. you paint a very vivid picture of this girl's appearance and you let it, along with a few clues, hint to her personality. very well-done. |
| perdita's kiss 2007-07-15 ch 2, | ok i don't understand why i hadn't read the first part, but now that i've read these, they are both beutiful in their differences and their similarites. i want to try that now with some of my own work. this is inspiring, so thank you. |
| akaSummer 2007-01-27 ch 1, | I love it. I'd offer constructive criticism if I could, but...I can't. Excellent detail, I love the way you describe her as "looking like a beach." |
| beyond.that.horizon 2007-01-27 ch 1, | how sad. i feel like i'm looking at a mirror. kudos. |