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| breezy nostrils 2007-02-19 ch 1,   | wow that's so dream-like. reminds me of that feeling of summer freedom. it's just so exciting and free. nice work. |
| Aslan Israel 2007-01-25 ch 1, | Something so lighthearted about it all. Very nice. |
| monochromelovers 2007-01-24 ch 1, | yeah, this is monochromelovers, back with a grammer check. (abandon it on the stove for a frozen reece's cup) "reece's" is supposed to be "reese's" (into painstained denim, pockets frayed, exactly the way i like it) Is "painstained" supposed to be "paintstained"? (suddenly we're five again with a liscence to play, liscense to drive) "liscence" should be "license" (so swerve a little more than neccasary on that black asphalt-) "neccasary" should be "necessary" (until the sun sets before your windsheild) "windsheild" should be "windshield" (then dissapear like a summer cinderella because it's midnight and i'm) "dissapear" should be "disappear" and "cinderella", hmm, it should be capatalized but you're using it as an adjective so, meh nevermind, unless you think you should. Well, I'm done, hope that was helpful. XD! |
| love that's leaving 2007-01-24 ch 1, | Marvelous. Glorious. Speechless. Favorites. Peace and Love ~> Lifted |
| Monochrome Lovers 2007-01-24 ch 1, | I love your prose. The detail is amazing. Usually I'd spend some more time talking about grammer and annalysis but I was just blown away reading this. Wonderful, wonderful poem. I have a collection of poems called "For Sunshine" I'm working on, hahaha, and I saw this poem on the "Just in"s and thought I might look at it and little did I know I'd fine something so dazzling. Thank you very much. Please, continue to write, write like mad. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-01-23 ch 1, | As always extraordinarily visual. Marvelous specifics. Great write. |