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| summerbee 2007-02-25 ch 1,   | i'm not going to say it makes much sense to me [i was warned] but that makes it seem terribly fascinating. i like the tarot cards theme- you pulled it off well. |
| Chemically Induced 2007-02-07 ch 1, | yeah i dont know your allusion material, so thanks for those footnotes. :) i promise onw day ill know them all. this poem is wonderful. seriously, it sounds like a spindown to some stromwild personal conclusion. like you said: it makes little sense, except to me. but! i can still enjoy the sound work and the attractive motion within. amazing. you are better than me. :) love, c.induced. |
| the naked civil servant 2007-01-31 ch 1, | Rimbaud is God. On another note, this is most pleasing. I cannot pretend I understand all its nuances, but the footnotes were most informative (congratulations, by the way, this is the first poem I have ever seen with footnotes - you're such an intellectual :p). I like the breakdown of coherance at the end, sounds most deranged, you know? & of course anything to do with Tarot just rules. Favourite line : and you have become the cold creeping under my clothes while i am burning up here on this deck. AH... |
| Cum grano saltis. 2007-01-23 ch 1, | You are right, it is kind of confusing, but I really like it, it somehow speaks to me. well done. |
| TrunkZy 2007-01-23 ch 1, | oh god. the title. the title is fucking brilliant. "and you have become the cold creeping under my clothes while i am burning up here on this deck." This is divine. The Pierre Brunel quote is fucking awesome. I must read Rimbaud! The buildup is brilliant. Really beautiful. |