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Reviews For: I think I have a sun

Gaia99
2007-04-30
ch 1,
Hi, thanks for the review. I haven't had time on the computer so I didn't get to review. Nice poem, and nice metaphors. Your descriptions are vivid and i think i can picture what you are trying to describe.
Osunale
2007-01-23
ch 1,
You use delightful personification and imagery. "My sun and I disguise/The morning in my smile/We fill my satchel up/With wishful futures" - The first use of "I think I have a sun" makes me think of 'son', but perhaps only because I haven't seen the sun used quite this way before...it's very interesting. The speaker seems so large that it can have a sun and keep the morning in a smile. The solidfication of 'wishful futures' is splendid. Very satisfying read.
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