A very relatable piece. I love the line "This paradise is my own hell." It really helped the reader to see through the writer's eyes. The last two lines pull the whole poem together very nicely and I thought it was a really good close to a piece like this. Good work!

very haunting

"This paradise is my own hell" gah! awesome line- helps set the mood and feelings that are going through the "narrator"

love the imagery, fantastic job!

good poem...

don't do it! XD