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| Maxegirl1313 2008-03-17 ch 4,  | abusevery good! reminds me of Maximum ride though... |
| skitly 2007-04-06 ch 10, | abuseAwsome story, reminds me of maximum ride: the angel experiment by james patterson. I like this better though; it moves heaps faster and its more...disturbing which is a god thing lol, keep it up! cant wait for the next update, xoxo skitly |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 9, | abuseyay! ... he had better get his eyes back after THAT!...now i have that part of Bohemion raphsody in my head: open your eyes, look up to the sky and se...i'm just a poor boy...cause i' easy come, easy go...lalala. |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 8, | abuseit's weird...me, living a few miles from the pacific ocean, i can't even begin to imagine what it would be like for someone from the middle of the country to move to the coast. like my second cousins who visited one summer. when we went to the beach they were in total shock. could not believe the shiny vastness before them...hey, that's nealry poetic |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 7, | abusewhat is becca's problem? creepy... |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 5, | abusejeeze. this is depressing. i wish i had becca's power though. so good... |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 4, | abuseSo...steven is some sort of animal guy? is he a cat? that's my guess. this is really good. sorry if i'm bugging you by reviewing chapter by chapter, but that's what i do >. |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-03-23 ch 3, | abuseThis ... is ... sick. good story, but sick. quite disturbing, and quite my cup of tea... i don't know what made me say that. favs list! |
| A.E. Waldo 2007-02-27 ch 4, | abuseYou write wonderfully in first person. The voice you give your characters is very real - and this is important in a genre like science fiction. I might be ageing myself here, but what you have reminds me of Animorphs. Here's the thing... your third person chapters aren't nearly as powerful as the first person. I don't think the third person is necessary. In fact, I would love to see chapters dedicated to specific characters. One thing I always find myself telling other writers (and often reminding myself) is to show your readers - don't tell them. Keep up the wonderful character development, and i look forward to reading more. - Amanda |
| Ducky 06 2007-01-30 ch 5, | abusenice chapter! man how i wish i had that power. that would be awsome to be able to turn into whatever, and whoever you wanted to. |
| DopeyTheChosen1 2007-01-29 ch 1, | abuseWHOA. that's one of the best i've read. can't read it all right now, but it's on my favorites. |
| Ducky 06 2007-01-25 ch 4, | abusedun dun dun...nice cliffy. cant wait for the next one |
| Ducky 06 2007-01-25 ch 1, | abusenice! i like it. well so far anyways. kind of reminds me of X-men, but with a Hero twist. cool beans. |