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Essie 2008-01-23 ch 6,	Wow, I like this story. It's a really different take and all the characters are so interesting. Love Mandy but Hoff? Hoff? I keep seeing David hasselhoff running down a beach in slow motion evertime that name comes up. >_< Can't wait to see what develops!!
Mik Sunrider 2008-01-19 ch 8,	Great story, very well done you had me laughing out loud several times.
Colorful Collision 2007-08-01 ch 7,	Welcome to Death Con. Haha. I'd freak if someone said that to be, sounds like a line in a movie. I'm still in shock; Lucifer not banging Eric, and here I was thinking Lucy snort would pass up sex when pigs fly. Thrilling story, however, I just love your sense of humor. A few senteces made me choke on whatever I was drinking at the time. Can't wait for the next chapter!
punkishnerd 2007-07-18 ch 7,	HURRY WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER! !
punkishnerd 2007-07-17 ch 6,	Damn that was really long! I loved it though!.. Lucifer just suddenly pushing eric out the door without banging him! He is changing.. slowly... But he shouldn't try to compare Mandy to Madelyn! I have a feeling thats why he chose her is to replace Madelyn.. in her image! It's wrong and deceitful!
kaoz 2007-07-05 ch 7,	I read, I read! I love this story! Keep updating.
The Ferrett 2007-07-04 ch 7,	Still utterely original, the convention idea sounds like fun. ::))
Nuvez 2007-05-17 ch 5,	Ha-ha, I like this. It’s funny but I keep picturing this as a manga type movie or TV show. You still have some typos, you ever hear of spell check? lol "Apparently, I was special to Lucifer in the human-contact-but-no-** way. Which was nice, really, because I got the money perks without actually having to, erm…put out." Hey, I’ve had that type of relationship and let me say it’s not bad. I had fun and I didn’t have to put out either… too bad guys like that don’t come around often enough… 1st one I ever met actually. "For the first time since I had died (a grand total of about three whole days) I dreamt. It wasn’t a good dream, one of those fluffy full of cotton candy and unicorns dreams. No, it was dark, and I seemed to need Sigmund Freud to analyze it." By the way you do know Freud’s analysis always conclude with something being sexual. So, I still need to finish that last chapter but so far I'm hooked with the story. The typos keep coming up which is a bit annoying but not enough that I'll stop reading.
Nuvez 2007-05-16 ch 1,	You have some typos other than that I liked the frist chapter. Sort of in a rush now so I'll save this to my thumb drive and read at work. More Input later. =)
A. December 2007-03-21 ch 2,	Oh so we can see ghosts? Lovely and original. It would be cool if you explained a bit more about how they look, so when I’m out in the world and I see someone who looks like that, I can scream and retreat. Lucifer relented a little too easy, I might have liked him to play with her a bit longer, “Maybe I’ll tell you later, when you’re not so grumpy.” etc. Gosh, dead people are nice in this, not like the living. Ryell as a fossil. That is awesome. I don’t seem to remember you mentioning a definite ethnicity in the first chapter, but I’m now imaging her as an Egyptian. By half-angel, are you referring to Nephilim? I know there is a more specific meaning, and some Jewish legends, but essentially… that’s what it can mean. Sorry if you already knew that and purposely used half-angel anyway, or if you have a completely different creature in mind. I’m really enjoying the exchanges between Ryell and Lucifer, these two characters play really well together. I really liked that she did not run away, that would have been kind of stupid. Everyone likes to think they will be prettier when they die. C’ept me. I will suddenly be hideous. Well, you’ve got to make her look different somehow, since she should not be recognized. Pretty is good. Men can be **. “Unless you’re some kind of pyromaniac, I doubt you could be an interference.” Ha ha, funny story about that… Excellent. The visit home was cute, you could sense her nostalgia and sorrow. You used just the right amount of detail for Lucifer’s home and Mandy’s new room. I have some friends who used to live above a funeral home. They worked as assistants to the morticians who owned it. The Office + Chinese food pure love. You are not wrong. These last paragraphs were lovely to read. Tres tres good. K, I look forward to continuing this later, keep it up! Luff
A. December 2007-03-19 ch 1,	I basically wrote an on going commentary while reading your first chapter here. It is how I review stuff. And that is why I do not give many reviews. Feel special. The “crash, bang, smack.” thing could have been annoying, but it had a kind of rhythm to it that fit well with the rest of the text at the beginning, so good. The “It’s not fair!” comments are kind of old, to be honest. It is alright for Mandy to do it, but I would kind of like the Grim Reaperess not to just let her have that one, you might want to think about adding some kind of brief lecture moment when she could just tell her off for a minute for even once thinking that anything ever would be fair? Cause that's not the way it works. Obviously. Fairness is a nice idea that has never really been seen in practice among humans yet. Ryell is Death, I would expect a little more cynicism and less understanding. And, now I laugh for a million years because Lucifer is gay. Fabulous. In an old story I wrote back in high school, I decided Lucifer was bisexual. I am glad I’m not just crazy and that there is someone else who can see that sort of… not quite straight thing about him. I am a little confused about this about the Divine Comedy vs. The Inferno reference. Isn’t that the same story? Yeah, I have it sitting beside my bed, I think it says The Devine Comedy on the front and then on the inside cover it mentions that people also know the same story as Dante’s Inferno. Did you mean to compare this work with Paradise Lost? That is the story were Lucifer is typically depicted as a fallen angel, not so much with The Devine Comedy. I would look it up but I can’t be arsed. I’m pretty sure that The Devine Comedy is the one with the nine circles and Paradise Lost is Lucifer’s story. And it hits her, she’s dead. Yep. But I am kind of laughing at her a little, while simultaneously feeling kind of bad for laughing. It is a good effect, but I am wondering if you are going to associate this particular view of the afterlife with any religion, or just go at it from a sort of secular-agnostic-but-not-really kind of standpoint. She is not asking any questions yet, maybe she’s just expecting to have it all answered now that she’s dead, or she’s just still in shock. I like that you have been pretty vague about her life so far, we don’t really need to know yet, and if it is important, bring it into the story later, but so far, I like this clean slate thing. Very like being born. You could be a bit more flowery with your description, I know it is about death, but still, that's not going to carry the entire story. So, I’m going to take a look at the next chapter when I grab a minute later, it’s got some definite potential so far. Good luck with the writing. Luff
Status-Writing 2007-03-09 ch 1,	In your last paragraph there is a quotation mark at the very beginning of it, and I don't think its supposed to be there. Other than that, very nice story. It reminds me of my best friend, who is 'awesome' (she is right next to me). XDD
punkishnerd 2007-02-14 ch 5,	OMG! HE KISSED HER?! What's the deal behind that? He leaves her for the day and just comes home and kisses her? lol.. can't wait to see the reasoning behind that! I am so glad you allowed her to attend her own funeral and with none other than the perfect guy! Vincent! I so hope those two hook up! I can picture them right now! Would make a cute couple. I was, however, kind of disappointed she didn't stay for her own eulogy. I, personally, always wondered what others would say about me after I bit the dust.. maybe that's just me. But, it was nice to see a large gathering there. Hopefully, it truly set her mind at ease. Now, I, as well as others, I'm Sure, want to know more about this Madelyn character and what her role is. I was kinda hoping to see atlease some mention of her here. Oh! and, was this guy who had been killed her first... job? LOVED IT! GREAT CHAPTER! Please post more soon! Your #1 Fan! Rickie ~ Jitt3rBug
SilentRiver 2007-02-13 ch 5,	Wow... nice ending, defintaley surprising! I got a little confused though, when did she make plans to go with Vincent? How did she know he was gone so long? Ack, maybe I just need to re-read a chapter or two. Hehe, Lucifer rocks!
The Ferrett 2007-02-12 ch 5,	Vava-voom. Woow, that was interesting. I'd say that this is really getting into the swing of things.

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