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| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-03-09 ch 1, | abuseThis is really fantastic so far. I love all the details you put in here, & we get a sense of who the narrator is from simple statements about her husband, being drunk from the wedding, & having paints. She must be an artist of some sorts, a free spirit, & maybe that's why she's having trouble being tied down. Hmm. Interesting. The language you used in this was just beautiful, too. And really, I've always loved staying in hotels. I don't know what it is, but there's just something really exotic or something about it. I could visualize this so clearly, I felt like I was there with her. It's great. Keep writing! :) |
| Muffinsrule 2007-01-26 ch 2, | abuseI always feel like I'm reading a real novel whenever I see one of your original works. I like it so far, I think you're very good with description. Anyways I noticed you posted a couple of new things since I last came here so I'm going to run off and read them now. :) Good work. ~Toodles!~ |
| Katterree Fengari 2007-01-25 ch 1, | abuseexcellent, it's got wonderful emotion to it. I love the phrase "the sheets that weren’t mine." |